What works?
The story is personal with good material and strong emotions.
"I think this piece is great. The fact that you won't let your illnesses hold you back, enrolled in school and have written this paper, is a testimony to you having a growth mindset." - Arthur Gandy
What doesn't work?
My topic under the assignment criteria is not clear. I need to revise for specific Focus.
Transitions are a little rough, some of my points do not flow smoothly into the next. Grammatical/ syntax errors. I need to explain the transition from fixed mindset to a growth mindset and add details about my understanding of adaptive mindsets. .
I need to incorporate the growth mindset into the conclusion. " I see myself as having a growth mindset because I could have let my illness dictate who I am.... etc.."
It is always important to distinguish the what and why and add the topic into the piece so it is clear, where you came from and why you are you and what you are to the reader and especially to the audience.
The story is personal with good material and strong emotions.
"I think this piece is great. The fact that you won't let your illnesses hold you back, enrolled in school and have written this paper, is a testimony to you having a growth mindset." - Arthur Gandy
What doesn't work?
My topic under the assignment criteria is not clear. I need to revise for specific Focus.
Transitions are a little rough, some of my points do not flow smoothly into the next. Grammatical/ syntax errors. I need to explain the transition from fixed mindset to a growth mindset and add details about my understanding of adaptive mindsets. .
I need to incorporate the growth mindset into the conclusion. " I see myself as having a growth mindset because I could have let my illness dictate who I am.... etc.."
It is always important to distinguish the what and why and add the topic into the piece so it is clear, where you came from and why you are you and what you are to the reader and especially to the audience.